Hello Everyone, I need your help in reviewing my SOP. Please give your suggestions. TIA

I don't know if it counts but there are some grammatical mistakes which you should rectify. Like it is career not carrier and some sentence are not arranged carefully. Do proofread it.

As per me try to reduce pages and proofread it for grammatical errors and sentence structures. Did you include all this finances when you filed your visa for the first time?

Nitin Kumar no I haven't included all this finance previously

Subodh Mandal Thanks for the feedback. I will check on it.

Vishal Panchal thanks . Will rectify the mistakes .